Project Introduction
The Book of Us project is about the Spontaneous Dinosaurs creating a book made up of stories each individual student wrote about. They got the chance to write about anything they felt like. The writing piece has to have a theme of: Express & Reflect, Inform & Explain, Evaluate & Judge, Enquire & Explore, Analyze & Interpret, Take a stand/ Propose a Solution.
We are writing these pieces because it'll be the best piece we've ever written because, when you write what you care about you show more passion towards it.
We are writing these pieces because it'll be the best piece we've ever written because, when you write what you care about you show more passion towards it.
Real-world writing purposes Field Guide
Click here to see the different kinds of Real-world writing purposes.
We used the writing purposes to see the theme of our writing piece. For my writing piece, it fit in the theme of Express & Reflect because I wrote about a story that I have experienced.
We used the writing purposes to see the theme of our writing piece. For my writing piece, it fit in the theme of Express & Reflect because I wrote about a story that I have experienced.
1 Topic = 18 Topics
5 Minute Quick Writes
Down Draft
Click here to see my down draft.
When I read my down draft, I noticed that there wasn't that much detail; I could've added more detail so the reader can feel how I felt. I made really good progress in my later drafts.
When I read my down draft, I noticed that there wasn't that much detail; I could've added more detail so the reader can feel how I felt. I made really good progress in my later drafts.
Reverse-engineered Mentor Text Graphic Organizer
Click here for the link to my Reverse-engineered Mentor Text Graphic Organizer.
A mentor text is a writing piece you use as inspiration towards your own writing piece.
The mentor text I used is a piece called, Curt Schilling: Hardcore Gamer by Nicholas Thompson. It talks about a baseball player that used to play a lot of video games.
This piece influenced me to write about the things my team mates have said, describe the felling in the last 17 seconds of the game.
A mentor text is a writing piece you use as inspiration towards your own writing piece.
The mentor text I used is a piece called, Curt Schilling: Hardcore Gamer by Nicholas Thompson. It talks about a baseball player that used to play a lot of video games.
This piece influenced me to write about the things my team mates have said, describe the felling in the last 17 seconds of the game.
Graphic Organizers
We had four different graphic organizers, they were: "Outline" tribute sheet, Sensory Images Graphic Organizer, Opening Lines Graphic Organizer, and the Proofreading Checklist. The most useful graphic organizer for me was the Sensory Images organizer because it assisted me in what I needed most help with, which was making them feel like they're in the story. I added more detail of what it looks like and feels like when you're playing.
The least helpful graphic organizer was the Proofreading Checklist because we should already be focusing on grammar and misspelling mistakes. I was already focusing on grammar when I would critique, but as a side note.
The least helpful graphic organizer was the Proofreading Checklist because we should already be focusing on grammar and misspelling mistakes. I was already focusing on grammar when I would critique, but as a side note.
Feedback & Critique
We also has different kinds of critique from our peers; the most helpful critique was the Author-led critique because I asked for what I needed help with. They focused on the part I needed help with and then I got what I wanted. I needed help with the ending of my piece and now I feel like it got more intense than before and I am proud of that.
The critique that was the least helpful was the Scissors critique because I never gained anything from it. It was basically a guessing game that benefited nothing. I don't think it is necessary for the next time you do this project again.
A critique that was helpful that wasn't an organizer was from Dr. P, he said that he wasn't a gamer so he didn't know the terms I was talking about. So I know that there are many more people who aren't gamers so I explained everything.
The critique that was the least helpful was the Scissors critique because I never gained anything from it. It was basically a guessing game that benefited nothing. I don't think it is necessary for the next time you do this project again.
A critique that was helpful that wasn't an organizer was from Dr. P, he said that he wasn't a gamer so he didn't know the terms I was talking about. So I know that there are many more people who aren't gamers so I explained everything.
Final Draft
Here is the link to my final draft.
What makes my the proudest from the final draft is the ending; where I captured the flag in 17 seconds and the enemy team had to beat that time. It got intense and suspenseful at the end and I really like that part.
Something that I would add is when we lost and the feeling we had when we lost. It would've added to the story because we had a momentum lost, and added more suspense,
What makes my the proudest from the final draft is the ending; where I captured the flag in 17 seconds and the enemy team had to beat that time. It got intense and suspenseful at the end and I really like that part.
Something that I would add is when we lost and the feeling we had when we lost. It would've added to the story because we had a momentum lost, and added more suspense,
Reflection
In the beginning of the project I already had my mind set to writing about when my friends & I got a rank in Call of Duty. While I was writing my down draft I just wrote everything I had on my mind down. I didn't really care about the organization, but when I started to get critique I started adding more detail into it and organizing it more. In my first draft, everything was word vomit and no one would understand it. Now in the final draft, I explained everything and anyone can understand the story. In the future I plan on putting a lot of detail so anyone can read it and understand my writing piece. Something I would've changed is that I would write about when we lost because it would've added more suspense to the story.